Tuesday, February 22, 2011

The Road to the Sea

sara beach


I still want you,
though it hasn't rained
in forever, and we have
lost our sun umbrella.
The road is closed, the one
that leads to the sea,
where no one cares about
the rain, nor the lost umbrella,
nor these words that whisper,

Post in honor of One Shot Wednesday.

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Blogger Maureen said...


12:15 PM  
Blogger David Rupert said...

An ode to love lost. Or is it love found?

12:41 PM  
Blogger Brother Ollie said...

Tight little poem - no waste.

5:10 PM  
Blogger Glynn said...

And where is the road to the heart?

Beautiful, L.L.

5:21 PM  
Anonymous Chris G. said...

The longings grip us long after the path of that romance has passed us by - for the memories of that seaside beauty, they are eternal. Sweet little piece for loves lost.

5:24 PM  
Blogger Dulce said...

Absolutely great... simple and yet so ful of words read between the lines

5:32 PM  
Blogger Laura said...

truly lovely...this line really wrapped around my heart: "and we have
lost our sun umbrella"...sometimes it is hard to love without the drama...funny how that happen in some relationships.

5:34 PM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

ah lovely...i think you should go...and hopefully they will come...

5:36 PM  
Anonymous Kodjo Deynoo said...

lovely small poem, expressive one with full of emotions

5:50 PM  
Blogger Kodjo Deynoo said...

lovely small poem, expressive one with full of emotions

5:50 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Gorgeous, I read this three times, so honest in its simplicity. One I will take with me after oneshot I think x

6:11 PM  
Blogger Unknown said...

I thought perhaps it was about love lost within a relationship. Lovely.
Favorite part:"these words that whisper, wanting."

7:11 PM  
Blogger S. Etole said...

a bit of poignancy that isn't quite grasped ...

7:21 PM  
Blogger Joelle said...

My dear, I think this is my favoritest of yours yet. Yes. Do you know Regina Spektor's song, "Come and open up your folding chair next to me. My feet are buried in the sand, and there's a breeze. There's a shadow. I can't see your eyes. And the sea is just a wetter version of the skies." It goes on, and somehow reminds me of your wanting, umbrella-less, shut off from sea.

8:35 PM  
Blogger Shashidhar Sharma said...

Hi L L ...
I enjoyed your verse so much.. its so beautiful...

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1:38 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

As Maureen said...Gorgeous! I love this alliterative creation:

nor these words that whisper,

Excellent circle of feeling.

2:41 PM  
Blogger Rachel Hoyt said...

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. I loved the alliteration in the final lines.

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5:46 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Ooohhh...the lovely things this stirs in one's heart!

My fav.


6:15 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

i don't think that we ever lose the wanting
even though the season has the road closed
there is always the trail of thought
that leads to the heart

6:41 PM  
Blogger Violet N. said...

So beautiful and sad in its yearning. The title and photo add to its weight and create a pensive, lingering mood.


7:24 PM  
Blogger Scott R. Davis said...

a wonderful poem of standing at the edge of the sea. OF the woman being fully enveloped by the land, sea and sky. On waiting to grasp the beauty and yet standing in respect of the majesty of nature and of God.

11:09 PM  
Blogger Pranavam Ravikumar said...

>>no one cares about
the rain, nor the lost umbrella<<

really Amazing...!

2:14 AM  
Anonymous Kavita said...

Ooohh.. lovely!
What a place to be!! That road... ever mystical... with its own little pavement (made of some little craving)..

Very beautifully pictured, my friend..

3:43 AM  
Anonymous Short Poems said...

So beautiful, wisely done. Short but sharp. Love it!

3:22 AM  
Anonymous Cheryl Smith said...

Still learning.

When did your hair get so long??

6:23 PM  
Blogger L.L. Barkat said...

Cheryl, that is my sweet daughter. :)

6:53 PM  
Blogger Louise Gallagher said...

Oh Wow!

12:40 AM  

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