Tuesday, January 11, 2011

On a Friday Snowing, for Wednesday, On Tuesday

snow on thorns

I wrote this on Friday, when I read the Random Acts of Poetry prompt. It's for One Shot Wednesday, but I'm posting it today. Tuesday. Why not? :)

Friday Afternoon

It is a gentle smothering,
this snow, this day
falling out
of a gray-white
sky, gently
concrete stairs,
which are all the wrong
sizes anyway.

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Blogger Kathleen said...

Oh, I love the surprise wackiness of the stairs! Taken over by the mild snow.

8:05 AM  
Blogger Maureen said...

You create a wonderful image with that snow "eclipsing concrete stairs".

8:47 AM  
Blogger deb said...

oh, I want to read this aloud.

9:04 AM  
Blogger A Simple Country Girl said...

and I want to lick the branches (and chew on frozen berries if they are edible).


11:17 AM  
Blogger S. Etole said...

wonderful rich photo and words ...

5:28 PM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

nice...i like this...we are getting ice right now...wish it was snow...

7:26 PM  
Blogger Linda said...

Such vivid imagery L.L. The stairs are all the wrong made right. I like that.

8:14 PM  
Blogger dustus said...

When falling is mentioned, it seems to me the lines following it seem to fall near effortlessly like snow itself. Fine poem.

9:37 AM  
Blogger Jerry said...

Careful on those eclipsed stairs!

10:32 AM  
Blogger Pete Marshall said...

i dont think i could top Dustus comment...what he says is so true...i love the beauty and then the throw away comment with the word anyway..very good..pete

1:48 PM  
Anonymous Monica Sharman said...

...in which case, the snow's act of smothering was an act of grace, covering over all the wrong things about the stairs.

2:12 PM  
Blogger Joanne said...

What Maureen said. Great shift at the end.

2:38 PM  
OpenID booguloo said...

Like the poem and loved your road trip adventure. Although I prefer a nice vidalia over a Spanish. ..smiles..

3:23 PM  
OpenID liv2write2day said...

Like autumn's falling leaves, snow leaves us poets having to take pen to paper. What amazes me is how there are so many ways to express the experience. Lovely and unique.

7:07 PM  
Blogger jen revved said...

love the gentle smothering, your delicate touch on the face of experience-- beautiful! xxxj

3:01 AM  
Blogger Shashi said...

I enjoyed reading this one.. very vivid... thanks for sharing...

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7:26 AM  
Blogger signed...bkm said...

beautiful images...LL...your poetry is always so delicate..bkm

8:25 PM  
Blogger Marcus Goodyear said...

I think what I like best here is that you found the snow gentle, when everyone else described the recent weather as an incapacitating storm.

11:50 AM  
Blogger Deidra said...

I like the steps. Like writing on Friday for Wednesday on Tuesday. Or wearing Monday socks on Sunday.

10:17 AM  
Blogger Steve Isaak said...

Superb work, simply stated but not simple minded.

2:07 PM  

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