Tuesday, February 08, 2011

Waking Up Metaphors

rose clothes

I was poking through my new indulgence, The Poet's Companion: A Guide to the Pleasures of Writing Poetry, and came across this statement...

'Love is a rose' would not be high on our list as a poetic metaphor.

Of course if it was not high on the authors' list, I had to tackle it— to see if I could find something different in a long-dead metaphor. Maybe I did, and maybe I didn't, but I had fun trying to do CPR in any case...


And what of the rose?
That pink shell
we suppose reveals,
through layer
of softness and curve
upon layer of softness
and curve. What of
the rose that morning
drowns, forgetting
we supposed.

Rose Clothes photo, by Sara. Used with permission. Post in honor of One Shot Wednesday.



Blogger Maureen said...

CPR on a rose
so many petals
on the floor.

I really like how the line breaks make reading this poem feel I'm dreamily swirling within the layers, gently. And then the dream ends with "that morning / drowns".

The word verification: woo tosti

8:25 AM  
Blogger David Rupert said...

There is a symetry to metaphors -- a progression from imagination to reality

9:32 AM  
Blogger Kelly Sauer said...

I love how intentional you are with your poetry. Somehow, your work always makes me a little free.

10:42 AM  
Blogger Violet N. said...

Nice try - and I like the reference to CPR in your intro too [Maureen - Ha!]

I bought the same book - 'The Poet's Companion' - a week or two ago on my Kindle. Like!

11:05 AM  
Blogger SimplyDarlene said...

I've read this 4 times and each time with a different meaning. How do you do that?

Your first aid response works.

I reckon the scent
on your
compression fingers.


1:30 PM  
Blogger L.L. Barkat said...

Who can resist
roses dying, roses
breathless crying
for one last chance
at love...


You guys are inspiring me all over again.

1:33 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...


1:57 PM  
Blogger S. Etole said...

"a rose is a rose" until you administered your brand of CPR ...

2:45 PM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

i agree with the line breaks...i think you did well for an overplayed metaphor...i really need to check out that book too...

6:37 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

You hit the nose with a rose.

7:47 PM  
Blogger dustus said...

Way to resuscitate a dead metaphor. Like this poem very much. The beginning question sets a great tone as well.

8:06 PM  
Blogger Linda said...

First of all I think you've done it! However, I must admit that I'm so glad country girl said she got four different meanings. I sometimes read the most beautiful words and end up feeling rather bewildered. This time I feel enriched.

8:33 PM  
Blogger James Christopher Sheppard said...

It may be a long dead metaphor, but you brought out the softness of the rose and made it sensual. Very nice. :)

8:50 PM  
Blogger Louise Gallagher said...

Mouth to kiss
kiss to mouth
You've ressucitated
the rose
healing its
fallen petals
with words
of love.

10:17 PM  
Blogger Glynn said...

A rose scent,
expiring as day
breaks, one
last burst
before petals

10:56 PM  
Blogger Jenne' R. Andrews said...

Exquisite-- I love:What of
the rose that morning
drowns, forgetting
we supposed." a rose that morning drowns, what of that rose, indeed? xxxj

2:49 AM  
Blogger Shashidhar Sharma said...

Hi LL Barkat...

I enjoyed your treatment of the Rose...

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya

6:42 AM  
Blogger Scott R. Davis said...

How beautiful a portrayal of the rose. Showing its feminine delicacy through your words and your photo. Brilliant. Thanks for capturing the beauty of the rose within your poetic language.
We see wilted roses often but you captured its essence.

6:49 AM  
Blogger izzy said...

Morning - especially early before shadows are gone-half drowned...
CPR on a rose is to keep growing
them, especially the repeat bloomers.
I do enjoy Poet's Companion-and your speculation, thanks!

8:40 AM  
Blogger Leslie said...

I like your CPR. Roses are worth a little, I think...

10:54 AM  
Blogger Bubba said...

Gotta be careful doing CPR on a rose - they've got thorns! (LOL!)

I think there's always some fresh life to be breathed into even the most time-worn metaphores.

12:51 PM  
Anonymous Kavita said...

I really like this... CPR on a rose... what a sweet thought (pun intended)...
I wonder whom you were really trying to revive here.. :)

Enjoyed this dreamy+romantic+life giving ride...

A lovely One Shot!

10:41 PM  
Anonymous melani rae said...

Great line breaks. And good job turning the cliche rose metaphor into something enjoyable to read.

6:23 AM  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

Mystical...I found it mystical...


9:12 AM  
Blogger kolembo said...

Ha. I like. Very much.

6:24 PM  
Blogger Brock S. Henning said...

ha ha...I love the way you pick this stuff apart. Always entertaining and insightful. :)

1:31 PM  
Blogger Steve Isaak said...

Solid, focused.

3:57 PM  

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