Tuesday, March 01, 2011

The Difference Between

Long Island

There was a time

we met by water, day was light and cool,
the water moved as it is wont
to do. You moved me with your words,
or was it with your silence.
The years have passed and silence too
and words as they are wont to do.
There are days
you can't remember water,
how it moves, or the difference between
silence and our words.

Post in honor of One Shot Wednesday.

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32 Comments:

Blogger Dulce said...

If I had to give a prize for this OSW, here it'd come!
meaninfully and beautifully written!
Thanks L.L.
:)
Dulce

5:09 PM  
Blogger jen revved said...

this is beautiful, the confluence of it; it is tender, lyrical-- a lovely piece. xj

5:15 PM  
Blogger Glynn said...

This is tinged with sadness, a lyrical kind of sadness, as if love was almost lost but is still there, fading.

This is beautiful, L.L.

5:47 PM  
Blogger Beachanny said...

I'd say this pretty much captures a real marriage. Well done.

5:49 PM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

smiles. this was a gorgeous write filled with feeling...i love how you wrap it around...and i imagine this is growing old together...

7:10 PM  
Blogger Leslie said...

So bittersweet. The love remains, even in the fading. It's very beautiful, and it makes me sad...

7:14 PM  
Blogger Kelly Sauer said...

This... this is one of my favorites from you...

8:21 PM  
Blogger signed...bkm said...

Just a wonderful and thoughtful poem that has a perfect lyrical touch....leaves a sigh in the heart...blessings...bkm

8:33 PM  
OpenID azfree said...

Sometimes there is comfort in both words and in silence. I love the repetition. It reminds me how in 7 years of marriage I am often wont to repeat myself!

8:45 PM  
Blogger Beverly Ann said...

Beautiful and poignant.

9:02 PM  
Blogger M.L. Gallagher said...

Beautiful and lyrical and tender.

Lovely work.

10:29 PM  
Anonymous Belinda said...

The last couple of lines are filled with intimacy, at least for me. Lovely.

4:34 AM  
Blogger LauraX said...

I love the circular motion of this poem.

7:07 AM  
Blogger Jerry said...

relational poems always get me in the gut. reminds me sometime of the older couples out to breakfast with nary a word spoken the whole time.

7:08 AM  
Blogger moondustwriter said...

your poem carries so many layers of symbolism with it - love, communication, time

mmm

Thanks for the One Shot

moonie

10:38 AM  
Blogger Mama Zen said...

This is a really pretty write.

12:10 PM  
Blogger Kathleen Overby said...

A lament. An acceptance. Made me feel sad and at peace with it.

1:34 PM  
Anonymous Dena Dyer said...

Wow, Laura. I love this. Water, words, circles--it's pretty perfect. :)

2:52 PM  
Blogger Shaunie @ Up the Sunbeam said...

A beautiful little slice of life!

3:57 PM  
Blogger Steve Isaak said...

Love this poem - spare line breaks make for even more emotional intensity between the thens and nows.

4:27 PM  
Anonymous Kavita said...

The lovely soft memories now dotted with hints of sadness... oh how beautifully you have captured it all here!!

Stunning, and so moving...

6:44 PM  
Blogger Joanne said...

Most of a lifetime of feeling in such a small space as large as the ocean.
Thanks so much. I am constantly amazed at your talent for putting so much in that small space.

7:17 PM  
Blogger Abby said...

oh! LOVE! i think i want more of the silence between my beloved and i, so, well, this just wraps me up in hope the journey longer...

8:30 PM  
Blogger Abby said...

oh! LOVE! i think i want more of the silence between my beloved and i, so, well, this just wraps me up in hope the journey longer...

8:32 PM  
Blogger Shashi said...

Very beautiful... soft and evocative...


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2:12 AM  
Anonymous Ben said...

Great short poem. Moved by both words and silence. I've been there before.

4:56 PM  
Blogger imoomie said...

Deep. My mind is walking the path of your words...

1:42 PM  
Anonymous Rhymetime(aka Pat) said...

Really nice words, you made me stop chasing the birds.
As I wanted to read right to the end, big props on the read I send.
Now the cat must go and search out another foe.

10:09 PM  
Blogger Ted M. Gossard said...

I like it. Kind of puts you in another place. Or helps you understand better the place you're in.

10:46 PM  
Blogger sojourner said...

sometimes we exchange more with silence than with words - i like the way your words reminded me of that truth

9:15 AM  
Anonymous Joann said...

This is beautifully written and captures sadness overtaking the years of sharing both the silence and the words. Perhaps the mind is drifting away and someone is being lost.

8:16 PM  
Anonymous amber@mercyrising said...

Beautiful

2:33 PM  

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